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So softly he kissed me, as his arms wrapped lovingly around my waist, pulling me close; holding me tighter.

Breaking the kiss, leaving me breathless and wanting more, He looks me in the eye and the stare is so intense I feel like he can see my soul. But he’s smiling and it’s so devastatingly beautiful I feel my heart stop.

“I will always love you” he proclaimed as he pulled me against his chest.
“You can’t be so sure.” I answered to his chest, feeling the tears prick my eyes.

He pulls me from his chest, putting his hands on my shoulders and doing that intense stare thing again.

In a voice that had so much certainty and strength he said:
“I will marry you one day. Even if by some freak chance we break up, I’ll always come back for you, no matter what. You’re my one and only, I will love you for eternity.”

The strength and meaning behind those words was evident.

I started to cry and your face became creased with worry. So I took your hands and I told you:
“That’s the most beautiful thing you have ever said to me.”

The tears spilled down my cheeks and you pulled me against you.

“I’ll always mean what I said.”
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11pm and the words start spilling.
I think I may just love you.
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:icontwilightpoetess:
awwwwws...I love this. possibly because I've been here....I always told him that he was claiming something impossible...and it turned out I was right. I hope that it works out differently for you, dear. Just a small grammatical problem...you switch from third person "he" to second person "you" toward the end. Keep it consistent! Readers will be less confused about what's going on. Other than that, excellent piece.

--
I've always known that I'd be trapped;
the world outside no longer shows.
And here, within this dream, I'm caught...
the Lady of the Blackened Rose.


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